Show don't tell
The buildings were tall.
The buildings loomed over me.
Sarah was really upset.
You could hear Sarah crying.
She was so happy to see him.
She was all over him.
The lake was beautiful.
The lake shimmered at every angle.
The heat from the house was immense, sirens screaming around the fire
Splashes from the stream of water could be heard from my house
Footsteps storming to my room, from walking to running, closer and closer suddenly a bang on the door.
Settings Activity 1
The musky air filled the bunkroom, drenched in fear and sweet, the trenches could be considered the worst place in the world, the resting grounds for many comrades and enemies. This is not a warzone it is a death pit.
My grandfather brought me to his barn, he says he's been keeping something for me, although I've never really been close to him, but since he is passing in 4 months (2014) I decided to come look after him. The barn door creaked open and burst into dust.
Completely still, surrounded by white, and stuck in winter, the cold seeps in through the cracks of the car. Not knowing how long I have left, I decided to leave and go find help, or at least die outside of my car.
Settings Activity 2
Shoulders bump and bang it's like navigating through an ants colony, just to get to work and back. Day's like these make me want to buy a car and finally get my license but for now, I have to take the subway. Even on the train I feel surrounded, there isn't even enough room for one more person. Just imagine an entire train with nowhere to even sit let alone stand.
Character
Name: Daniel Russell
Age: 20
Eye Colour: Green
Phobia: Spiders
Where do they live: Venice
Height: 5'9
Favorite clothing: Clothing
Favorite thing: Oiud
Pet Peeves: none
Things that make them happy: Oiud
Fondest Memory: First time trying Oiud
Hobbies: Smoking Oiud
No comments:
Post a Comment
To support my learning I ask you to comment as follows:
1. Something positive - something you like about what I have shared.
2. Thoughtful - A sentence to let us know you actually read/watched or listened to what I had to say
3. Something thoughtful - how have you connected with my learning? Give me some ideas for next time or ask me a question.